Rainbow Brite: An Original Retelling

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Rainbow Brite: An Original Retelling

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I'd mentioned before how I wanted to tell the story of Rainbow Brite in my own way. I wanted to expand on the original events, and put a darker spin on the series as well. By this time, you should know that I enjoy torturing my characters in some sense. I have no idea how this attempt will pan out. I do know that I'm snowed in, and I simply keep writing. Here is the first part of The Beginning of Rainbow Land. It occurs before Wisp arrives with the ball of light. There are notes at the end of the chapter, so please look at them as well. Enjoy :)

The Beginning of Rainbow Land, Part 1


The little girl looked out the window of the second story drab grey building. Her chin rested in her hands as she looked upon the outside world, which was becoming whiter with each passing hour. Tiny flakes dotted the air, falling and gliding on some unseen breeze. It was beautiful to her. Down below on the street, men and women garbed in black rushed to and fro, coming home from work or finishing errands. She could hear the faint cry of merchants hawking their ways on Market Street in the distance. Twilight was beginning to settle on the city. The little girl was garbed in a plain grey dress, which made her bright blonde hair even brighter. Her hair was pulled into a high ponytail atop her head, and tied with a purple ribbon. The dress she wore was made from a very simple and sensible fabric that had been donated in bolts to the orphanage.

The little girl didn’t mind the colorless piece of fabric. In her imagination, it was a blue dress, held up by red suspenders. The sleeves were puffed, and each section was a different color of the rainbow. The dress was trimmed in white. To match the dress, she wore colorful boots that were red and then the fabric became colorful sections, just like the sleeves of the dress. They would come up to her knees. To the little girl, it was the most beautiful outfit in the world.

In the distance, a bell rang. Another little girl ran into the room. She spotted her friend sitting near the window. Just like the first girl, she too was dressed in the same grey dress. Unlike the first girl, she had red hair that was in pigtails. “Wisp! Come on! Sister Margaret will be angry if you don’t come for dinner now.”

Slowly, Wisp turned her head, a dreamy look on her face. “Did you see the snow? It’s beautiful.”

“You’re going to be late for dinner. You’ll get a few raps on the hand again with a fork,” warned her friend.

“Anne, you’re no fun,” replied Wisp, moving from her spot at the window.

“Am so! I just don’t like the fork!” replied her friend playfully.

Each of the girls giggled. Anne grabbed Wisp’s hand and they ran down the hallway and down the stairs, skidding to a stop outside the large mess hall doors. The doors were quite heavy and thick, and the low murmur of conversation could be heard behind them. Anne pushed open the door and suddenly, the roar of chatter escaped, enveloping the two girls as they entered. Row after row of tables were before them, each table filled with girls of all ages and sizes. Anne led Wisp to the end of the line, where they were greeted by Sister Margaret.

“Ah, you two just barely made it,” she commented, a large wooden fork in her hand.

“Yes, Sister,” replied Wisp.

“Off daydreaming I bet, forgetting that there are responsibilities to attend to in the real world.”

“I was watching the snow, Sister. It’s so beautiful. All the tiny little flakes falling onto the ground below.”

Sister Margaret grunted. “All that snow creates a mess. The horses have trouble with the carts and wagons. People have trouble getting to work. I have to take care of brats like you.”

Wisp, never faltering, commented, “Don’t you feel good when you see how beautiful the snow looks on the trees?” She held up her hands in a wide arc.

“No,” remarked Sister Margaret coldly, rapping Wisp on the tops of her hands, “And you shouldn’t either. It’s not wise or useful.”

Wisp yelped in pain, but did not cry. Anne patted her back, and the two walked forward in line to take their plates.

“Oh and Wisp?” called Sister Margaret.

“Yes, Sister?” asked Wisp, turning her head.

“Since you think this snow is so “beautiful”, as you put it, you can go outside tomorrow after temple and help the groundskeeper shovel paths. That should teach you a good lesson.”

“Yes, Sister,” agreed Wisp. She turned, and lowered her head, looking at the ground.

“Wisp? Are you okay?” asked Anne, concerned.

“I wish Sister Margaret could see the beauty in the snow,” was all Wisp said before quietly going through the line.

The scene at dinner was nothing new for Wisp. Sister Margaret was one of the Guardian Sisters from the temple who took care of the orphan children. Sister Margaret and many others were not fond of the girls in their charge, but they did their work for the Goddess, believing it was their will and duty to bring up the poor unfortunate souls without parents. To see a happy, bright young child such as Wisp tended to bother the Sisters, and they tried to instill a sense of reality into the girl. Their efforts, however, did not work as well as they wanted.

The next afternoon, Wisp was sent outside to speak to the groundskeeper and to take care of her punishment. She’d already been in trouble during temple, when she had been caught glancing out the window at a large rainbow instead of singing praises to the Goddess as the other orphans were doing.

Wisp skipped along the path until she reached the small cabin that housed the groundskeeper. He was an older gentleman, with hair white as snow and a moustache to match. He wore a pair of blue overalls with a white shirt and work boots, and a simple brown cap atop his head. He was a very quiet man, and very shy. In truth he simply didn’t know how to talk to women folk, and that included young girls. The groundskeeper was collecting some tools from his shed when Wisp arrived.

“Mr. Groundskeeper,” called Wisp. “I’m here to help shovel. Sister Margaret said you’d have a shovel for me.”

The groundskeeper turned and nodded slowly, reaching for the large shovel used for snow. He did not say a word.

“Don’t you think this snow is beautiful? Look how it covers the trees,” called Wisp happily, spinning in slow circles. “Isn’t it wonderful?”

“Well… I suppose so,” replied the groundskeeper after a few moments. He handed Wisp the shovel.

Wisp took the offered shovel. “Do you think Sister Margaret likes it? She says she doesn’t.”

The shovel was big for Wisp, and hard for her to hold. On top of that, it was heavier than she expected. Nevertheless, she began attempting to shovel the snow. The groundskeeper watched her, not giving an answer to her question. Wisp pushed the shovel through the snow, lifting it with all her might and then dumping the snow on the side of the path.

Without a word, the groundskeeper went back to his work. For a few minutes, Wisp continued to shovel. Somewhere nearby, a bird sang in the trees. Hearing its song, Wisp paused, listening closely. She looked around for the tree where the sound was coming from. It did not take long for her to discover the tree, and she ran to it, kicking up the snow. “You like the snow, don’t you, little bird? It makes you want to sing.”

The bird trilled back, and Wisp giggled. “I think so too,” she replied.

Once more, the bird started its song, and Wisp twirled in response, shoveling forgotten. She was lost in the reverie of song and snow, and couldn’t have felt happier at that moment. Of course, who should come to check on her but Sister Margaret.

“Wisp! What are you doing?!” she yelled, holding her maroon dress with the gold trim high as she crossed the snow.

Wisp was jolted from her dance, and she looked over to the Sister, embarrassed to have been caught. “I’m sorry, Sister,” she apologized, “but I couldn’t help it. I wanted to dance with the bird.”

Sister Margaret grabbed Wisp by the wrist and began dragging her back across the snow. “You were to shovel paths in the snow, not daydream. If you cannot follow a simple task, then you can be punished!”

Sister Margaret was true to her word. She banished Wisp to her bed for two days, with bread and water for food. She was not allowed to talk to her nearby bunkmates, or move from her spot unless one of the Sisters escorted her. Wisp wasn’t too sad though. She spent her time daydreaming, and looking out the nearby window. She dreamed of wearing the pretty dress, and of being surrounded by other kids like herself. She saw herself with kids who loved beautiful things and colors and didn’t mind talking about them.

The winter season eventually ended, replaced by spring. It was one of Wisp’s favorite seasons. Plants and animals were coming back to life, and color sprang forth from the brown of the Earth. It was a magical time of the year, and Wisp relished in the times she was allowed outside. She’d take on any chores, as long as she could work in the beauty of nature.

It was her love for nature that influenced her meeting with Sister Eva. Sister Eva was in charge of the garden for the orphanage, the one that grew the vegetables used for many meals. Sister Eva was tall and thin, and her hair was always cut close to her head because she hated it getting in the way while she gardened. Wisp’s interest in plants and gardening amused Sister Eva, and she took on the child as a mini gardener.

Together, they tended to the plants, and Wisp learned that Sister Eva was a rare soul who enjoyed the colors and the beauty just as much as she did. It made Wisp happy to know that she wasn’t alone.

“Don’t you think the garden is a rainbow?” asked Wisp as she searched for weeds among the tiny plants.

“Why do you say that?” asked Sister Eva, who was carefully watering.

“Think of all the colorful vegetables we’ll have. Red for tomatoes, orange for carrots, yellow for squash, green for lettuce, purple for eggplant…” Here Wisp trailed off.

“What about blue?” asked Sister Eva gently.

“I can’t think of a blue vegetable,” replied Wisp. “Is there one?”

Sister Eva thought for a moment. “I don’t think so. I’m not sure.”

“There should be,” remarked Wisp. “Then you could make a rainbow on your plate at every meal.”

“Yes,” answered Sister Eva, smiling as she nodded, “you could.”

“Colors are beauty. They make me happy. When I grow up, I’ll have the most colorful dress, and lots of colorful things.”

“Then you’ll be like a rainbow.”

Wisp nodded. “I would!”

It was late spring of that year when Wisp began having dreams of a different kind. Usually she dreamed of playing with her friends, or being a grown-up with colorful things and dresses. These new dreams, were different, almost terrifyingly real.

Wisp began seeing a new place on a different world. It looked nothing like the orphanage. The land was dark all the time, and no color could be seen. The land was rocky, with tall mountains. The only trees that could be seen were bare and scraggly. Sometimes, her dream showed her vicious creatures that roamed the barren landscape. They looked like large birds and worms with large, gnashing teeth. Once, she saw a worm kill something, and she woke from the terror of seeing the creature crushed between powerful jaws. Other times, she saw the outline of a shadow move over the land, making it even darker.

Often, the dream would occur on bad days, and Wisp would see the land in all of its darkness. She wondered why it was so dark and empty. Where was the color? The pretty flowers, and rainbows? Darkness and more darkness plagued the land.

One night, Wisp found herself above the land, hovering in the sky. She looked down at this place, this empty and lonely placed and wished that she could do something to make it look better. It was on this night that she saw new creatures, different from the monsters she had seen before. These creatures were small and furry. They were colorless, and any area on them that appeared to have colored seemed faded. They spoke in a language that was unfamiliar and lived in small groups in tiny caves and crevices. The shadow that flew over the land scared them, and they were not immune from the birds and worms that lived here.

“Oh you poor creatures!” she called out, unable to simply watch anymore.

She was startled when a ball of light appeared beside her. “You don’t like what you see?” it asked her. The voice was feminine and gentle.

“What happened to all the color?” asked Wisp.

“Do you remember the shadow?”

“Yes.”

“That shadow rules the land. It didn’t used to be this way. This used to be a happy place.”

“What happened?”

“One day, the person protecting this land lost in the battle against darkness. No matter what she tried, she failed in the end,” explained the light sadly. “The shadow took over the land, and it has been this way ever since.”

“No one could bring back the color?” asked Wisp.

“No one has tried to. The shadow continues to rule.”

“That’s terrible.”

“Yes, it is,” agreed the light.

And with that, Wisp awoke from her dream. That day she was very quiet, and lost in thoughts. She thought about the light and the conversation they’d shared. That place she saw was dark and gloomy and it should be bright and colorful. Wisp shared her dream with Anne, but Anne only giggled.

“Oh Wisp, it’s only a dream!”

“But I have that dream every night. That place is real. It has to be!”

Anne looked at her friend seriously. Wisp had a large imagination, but this was too crazy, even for Wisp’s standards. “Dreams aren’t real, Wisp. They’re just stories while we sleep.”

“What if the story was real?”

“It’s not,” continued Anne.

Wisp frowned. She had thought her friend might understand. She did not try to tell Anne about anymore dreams about the strange land she saw.

Sister Margaret also noticed a change in Wisp. Instead of talking about colors and beauty, as she was wont to do, Wisp was often quiet and kept to herself. Sister Margaret intended to discover the reason for the change. She wondered if perhaps the child had finally given in to reality, instead of believing in her silly notions and ideas.

“Wisp, come here,” she called sternly late one afternoon. Wisp had been washing the windows in her office, but had not spoken a word since entering.

“Yes, Sister?” Wisp turned and placed the cloth back in the bucket she had been using. She dried her hands on her dress.

“Why are you so quiet?” Sister Margaret got straight to the point.

Wisp was quiet for a few moments. She looked down at the floor. Just as Sister Margaret was about to scold her for failure to respond correctly when asked a question, Wisp spoke. “Have you ever had a dream that seemed real?”

Sister Margaret was taken aback by this question. She had expected the child to talk about beauty or some such nonsense. “Of course. Everyone dreams of things that look real, but they’re just dreams in the end. They aren’t real.”

“Even if they seem real?”

“Yes.”

“Anne says dreams are stories you see when you sleep.”

“Anne would be correct. It’s like looking at a picture book.”

“What if you were in your dream, and everything you did seemed real?”

“It’s not.”

“I had this dream about this place where there’s no color, and I see things that are real. There’s this ball of light. It talks—“

“Wisp,” began Sister Margaret, quickly becoming annoyed with the conversation, “I just told you. Dreams aren’t real. They aren’t true, no matter what you think. Now get back to work. I don’t want to hear any more about this.

Wisp sighed and picked up the cloth once more. She worked quietly for the rest of the afternoon, and did not speak of her dream to Sister Margaret anymore after that.

“What do you think you could do?” asked the light.

“I’d try to bring back the color,” replied Wisp. She hovered over the land once more. Thunder rumbled and lightning lit up the landscape. Below, a large creature with spikes on its back raced across the land.

“How would you do that?”

“I don’t know,” admitted Wisp. “but I’d try to find a way. Without color, this place is empty.”

“What if you could save this world?”

“I’d try to bring back the color and beauty,” replied Wisp.

The day after Wisp had the dream, the orphanage took a trip to a large open meadow nearby. They were celebrating spring. Little girls raced about the meadow and through the wild flowers. Laughter and shouting could be heard. Wisp chased Anne in a game of tag.

“You can’t catch me, Wisp!” called Anne.

Wisp sped up and ran faster. “You wait and see!” She reached out a hand, but missed Anne, who took a sudden turn.

“I told you so!” laughed Anne.

Wisp changed her direction to follow Anne. Once more, she came closer and reached out a hand. The tips of her fingers touched the back of Anne’s dress. “I got you!” she cried with glee.

Anne slowed, and fell onto her back in the tall grass. “Phew! That was fun!”

Wisp fell beside her friend, and spread out her arms. “Isn’t this great? Look at all the flowers. They’re so colorful.”

A large blue butterfly lazily glided overhead, and Wisp’s mouth opened wide in amazement. “Look at that butterfly!” she called, pointing.

Anne turned her head, looking where Wisp pointed. “It’s blue,” she remarked lazily, tucking her hands behind her head.

Wisp rose to her feet. “I’m gonna follow it. Are you coming?”

Anne shook her head. “No. I’m too tired to follow it. You go.”

“Okay,” called Wisp as she began to chase the butterfly.

The butterfly continued its lazy flight, gliding back and forth on the wind. Wisp followed it, getting further and further from her group with each passing minute. No one noticed her wander off.

Eventually, Wisp noticed that it was very quiet around her. She glanced around, looking for her friends. “Where’d everybody go?” she wondered.

No one answered her. Wisp sat down on a nearby log, and rested her chin on her hands. “What do I do now?”

“Wisp,” called a voice.

Wisp recognized that voice. She looked around her, but didn’t see the light. The butterfly was nowhere to be found either. She looked down at her feet. “Aww…I’m just hearing things,” she commented sadly.

“No, you aren’t,” called the voice again.

Wisp looked up. Before her stood a woman bathed in a golden light. She wore a long, flowing white dress. Her hair was the color of chocolate, and she smiled softly at Wisp as she held out a thin hand. “Who are you?”

“I’m the light from your dreams,” replied the woman.

“But…dreams aren’t real,” muttered Wisp sadly.

“Who says so?”

“Everyone I speak to. Sister Margaret and Anne. Dreams are just stories you see when you sleep,” she quoted.

The woman laughed, a rich, deep laugh. “Not all dreams aren’t real. Some are. Yours was. I showed you a very real place.”

“That dark place really exists?”

“Yes,” replied the woman sadly. “It needs help. That is why I’ve chosen you.”

“Me?”

“You are the only one who has seen the world and wishes for it to be different. Would you like to save it, Wisp?”

“I could save it?”

“Yes, but only if you really want to.”

Wisp nodded. “I do want to save it.”

“If you want to save this world, then take my hand. However, you will not see this world again, or be able to return. You should think hard before you make your decision.”

“Not…see my friends again?”

“That’s right. It is not something to be taken lightly.”

Wisp sat on the log, deep in thought. She didn’t want to leave her friends, especially Anne. She also couldn’t bear the thought of the land being so dark and dreary either. She wanted to see it changed back to the way it was. She didn’t know what that looked like, but she had imagined it. “I could… bring back the color?”

“Yes, you can, if you can defeat the darkness.”

Wisp stood up, looking determined. She looked up at the woman. “I want to go and save that world,” she declared.

The woman chuckled softly. “Then take my hand, and we will go.”

Even though Wisp had declared her decision, she still nervously reached for the woman’s hand. As soon as her fingers touched the woman’s skin, she became away of a warm, tingly sensation. It was calming and soothing. Wisp closed her eyes as the sensation washed over her body. Every part of her felt relaxed. She let that feeling enclose her, and then, there was blackness.

Author Notes:

- I decided to use this part to tell of Wisp's origins. I can say this place is certainly not Earth. I still follow the non-aging theory and that means Wisp's arrival happened sometime before 1285. That is not a period of Earth I wanted to use. The planet she is from is not named, but it borrows aspects of the late 1800's on Earth. Mind you it's not entirely true to that period of time.
- The religion I did not go into detail with. Normally if I would have chosen Earth for Wisp's location, I would have used Christianity. However, this is an alien planet so no Christianity. Instead, they worship a Goddess, and those who follow the Goddess are called Guardian Sisters. They are very similar to nuns, and wear the maroon dress with the gold trim.
- I could not help but pay homage to my favorite series as a preteen. I doubt any here have read it, but I could be wrong. Anne of Green Gables was my favorite growing up, and I wanted to incorporate that into the first part. So you get Wisp's friend Anne (who looks like Anne Shirley), the incidents in the orphanage and Wisp always being positive (like Anne), and the groundskeeper, who is shaped after Matthew

If you have actually made it this far and read the story, let me know what you think. I'm happy to have feedback.
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Re: Rainbow Brite: An Original Retelling

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Wow ... you are so creative and hardworking ... I really have to read all of your stuff ... I hope I have some more free time this evening so I can read all those stories ...
this new one "RB-retelling" seems to be very interesting ! :)

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Tom-sprite wrote:Wow ... you are so creative and hardworking ... I really have to read all of your stuff ... I hope I have some more free time this evening so I can read all those stories ...
this new one "RB-retelling" seems to be very interesting ! :)
XD Well you need to keep up with me Tom! In all honesty I cannot recall ever writing so much in such a short period of time. It only took me a few hours to finish this first chapter, which was surprising. It is as though I have been possessed by something, and all I can do is hold on tight.
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Woooow !
That was really cool ...
I love how this story begins ... its told in a more sophisticated way as the original !
It s not too dark ... I enjoyed reading very much.
It felt a little like being absorbed by the fantasy. :lol:

Wisp s character is represented very vivid and the reader can easily identify with her because of her attitude ... it s like the story tickles out the hidden Wisp in oneself.
I love how she is in love with the beauty of nature and the colours !

:rb:

One just has to hate sister Margaret a little bit ! :lol:

Can t wait to read more !!! ^^

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Tom-sprite wrote:Woooow !
That was really cool ...
I love how this story begins ... its told in a more sophisticated way as the original !
It s not too dark ... I enjoyed reading very much.
It felt a little like being absorbed by the fantasy. :lol:

Wisp s character is represented very vivid and the reader can easily identify with her because of her attitude ... it s like the story tickles out the hidden Wisp in oneself.
I love how she is in love with the beauty of nature and the colours !

:rb:

One just has to hate sister Margaret a little bit ! :lol:

Can t wait to read more !!! ^^
Thanks Tom! I liked how it began and Wisp's character. I tried to stay true to her. My goal is not to retell it completely, only to use the episodes as a guide and then add on and twist from there. I'm currently working on the first episode. At this point I think I'm trying to get down the basics and then I'll have to go back in and add everything for twists.

For example, the scene with the sprites in the beginning was very similar, save for the fact that the fruit is the first they've seen in awhile. They tend to go without food for many days, and starvation is not uncommon among them.

My only problems will be having to write my own episodes in between the show's to explain Tickled Pink, Moonglo, and Stormy's arrival. Stormy's is rather easy, as I'll base that off of Lost Storms in a sense. It's the other two. I was thinking that Tickled Pink would end up crash landing to escape something evil, but unsure of Moonglo just yet. If you've ideas, send 'em my way.

As for Sister Margaret, she's not be a loved character. She's that stereotypical evil nun sort. Sister Eva, on the other hand, was to be the kind one and the groundskeeper the same.

I promise it will be darker. You should know my writing well enough by now to know I can very easily make something simple so very angsty.
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Good luck for your story ...
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Re: Rainbow Brite: An Original Retelling/Chapter 2

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I finished part 2 tonight, finally. It took some work. It's going to take forever to finish up the first two episodes at this rate XD You'll notice that while overall adding a dark tone, some events were changed, added, or switched around. That was all intentional. Again, it's following the original, just with changes. If you catch any major grammar errors, do let me know...there's bound to be some.

The Beginning of Rainbow Land, Pt. 2


When Wisp awoke, she saw only whiteness around her. No, she realized, it wasn’t white. Not pure white, in any sense. There were flecks and specks of pale colors, all mixing and mingling together. She looked down, and realized that her body was suspended in this place. She wasn’t afraid, and instead felt a comforting presence from the area itself. She studied her surroundings, wondering what this place could be.

“You’re awake,” commented a voice. Wisp recognized it as the same woman from before.

“Where…where am I?”

“You are in a realm of light. Nothing here is tainted by darkness or evil. It is simply pure, guiding light.”

“Why am I here?”

“To prepare you, Wisp. We will soon be to the place you have seen in your dreams.”

“But—“ Wisp stopped as she felt her body becoming warmer. She looked down, and saw herself encased in a golden hue. It dissolved in moments, and Wisp could only stare opened mouthed. “My… my dress!”

The woman chuckled, and Wisp felt herself being gathered into someone’s arms. “Yes, it is the dress you have imagined, isn’t it?”

“How—“

“Little Wisp, you enjoy colors, and light. You believe that these things bring a smile to a person’s heart and soul.”

Wisp nodded. “Of course!”

“Then consider this dress a gift, and a reminder of those things. You will need those beliefs as you fight to restore that land.”

The woman continued to hold her, saying no more. Wisp did not move in her arms, content with this feeling she had never felt before. She could not place it, nor remember a time when she had felt the same way. After a time, the feeling began to disappear, and Wisp looked up at the woman, who was moving away. “Come. We will be there in a few moments.”

The land was dark, as though ink had been spilled across a canvas. Bold strokes of lightning lit the sky every few moments, and the rumble of thunder never desisted. Boulders and large stones dotted the landscape, and the only trees were skinny and bare. In the distance, a low rumbling could be heard, becoming louder the closer it came. It signaled the arrival of a large, swollen worm that had gaping spikes on its back and teeth to make. It gnashed at anything in its path, roaring incoherently as it came past.

In the distance, the shadowy outlines of scraggily mountains could be sign, and the scratchy call of the wild birds that dwelled there echoed over the cliffs. They were large avians, with grey-brown feathers, and long talons. Their rows of sharp teeth identified them as carnivorous, creatures that would attack anything that was made of fleshy meat. Two such avians caught each other’s eye, and a duel broke out. They squawked angrily at each other, reaching out to scratch and maim the other.

Eventually, one grew tired of the fighting and glided off. His enemy gave no sign of following. The bird flew low, in search of something for his next meal. He passed a tiny cave in the side of a cliff. He flapped his wings, a powerful gust pushing him up higher. Then, he was gone.

From the cave, a tiny head peeked out. It was pale yellow in color, its arms and legs a dismal grey. The eyes studied the area, keeping watch for any of the nasty creatures that would be more than happy to tear it to pieces. His ears picked up no rumblings from the ground, and hesitantly, he ventured out further from the cave. It was his duty to collect fruit for himself and his companions. Very little fruit could be found in this unsuitable land, and so many nights they went hungry and dreamed of a time that their elders had told them about, a long time ago when the land was peaceful, and food was plentiful. It seemed like a distant dream. The creature sighed, and turned to his companions. He would have to tell them it would be another night of starvation, and no food.

As he began to open his mouth, one of his companions, pale red in color, pointed outside, chattering in an excited whisper. The leader spotted it. It was hard to see, but tiny berries dotted the upper branch of a scraggly tree. His eyes widened in amazement. They would not starve tonight after all! He rushed forth from the cave, intent on retrieving the fruit for a meal. His eyes darted back and forth as he kept an eye out for any creatures who might prey upon him, but no such creatures crossed his path.

Quickly, he climbed the tree, reaching for the branch with the desired fruit. He was a few inches short of being able to grab for the branch. It was then that he heard the scratchy call of the large bird behind him. In fear, he fell out of the tree, landing hard on the unforgiving ground below. He looked up, and watched with disappointment as the bird snapped the branch off, gliding away and into the distance. There would be no meal tonight. Sadly, he pushed himself to his feet, and with a heavy heart, walking back to his companions.

The youngest companion had wandered outside, still curious about the land. He was not yet old enough to be on alert and fearful of the danger that surrounded them constantly. He looked into a puddle of stagnant water at his reflect. He smiled at himself, and the one looking back at him copied his movements. He began to smile wider, but the surface of the water broke. A fish jumped up, jaws gnashing, wanting to tear his face off. In fear, he cried out and backed into the cave once more. He joined his companions in the very back. Each of them looked into the distance, afraid to admit the obvious.

Looming in the far distance, a large castle could be seen, completely shrouded in shadow. It sat atop the highest mountain, overlooking the dismal land. A long winding road led up to the front door. The lightning and thunder seemed most prominent around this area. Here, the large birds congregated on the ledges, cackling and calling out to their companions, when they weren’t turning and eating a weak comrade. Nothing, it seemed, was ever safe for very long.

Safety was long sought. Farther away from the castle, another furry creature ran for his life. He was similar to the others that were spread across the landscape, save for his snow white fur. Faster and faster his feet pounded against the unforgiving stone path. He breathed heavily, knowing that to stop was to embrace and accept death. For a moment, he glanced behind him. Catching up to him was a large creature that resembled a ram. It was lavender in color, and its horns were large. The blood red eyes were intent on the prey in front it, and the creature appeared as though he could run for quite a distance.

The little creature turned back around, attempting to put more energy into his legs. Instead, he found himself slowing, weakening. He could not remember how long he had been running. It wasn’t wise to wonder how long, only to know how to escape. He stumbled over a small stone in the path, tripping and landing face first. He struggled to pull himself to his feet, finding that he lacked the energy for even that simple task. Slowly, he brought himself to one knee, hoping, praying that it wasn’t his last movement.

From behind, the ram pounded the ground. It licked its lips, slimy tongue slobbering over rows and rows of sharp teeth. It lowered its head, intent on picking up the tasty treat and tossing it into his mouth. The little creature cowered in fear, hearing the creature come up behind him. He waited, hoping that death wouldn’t be painful.

Meanwhile, the group of sprites from the cave had ventured outside. After much discussion, it had been decided that there was simply no food in the area, and that they must find a new temporary home, if they wanted to survive. They moved along at a quick pace, all eyes darting back and forth, ever watchful for any creatures that would decide they’d be a good meal.

A bolt of lightning struck a nearby boulder, which loosened from its position atop the cliff wall. Smaller pieces rumbled down in the slide, following by the boulder. Each creature skidded to a sudden stop, covering their heads with their hands in case debris flew in their direction. Dust rose, and they coughed, covering their mouths to keep from inhaling anymore. As the dust settled, they continued, sticking together.

Suddenly, there was a noise, a strange noise they’d never heard before. Frantically, they looked around, trying to locate the source, hoping it wasn’t another creature. One of them spotted it before the rest, and pointed, hopping from foot to foot and chattering loudly. All looked up to see a flying line of light, bright and noisy and…headed straight for them. Quickly, they scrambled. The leader motioned them on ahead, across some large boulders. They hid behind this, watching in terrified fascination as the light descended and slowed, instead of crashing into the ground.

With one brilliant flash, the ball of light disappeared, leaving Wisp standing in the same spot, holding a small brown suitcase with a star on it. Her knees trembled, shaky. She hadn’t touched ground in awhile, and needed to gather her balance once more.

She heard the disembodied voice of the woman. “Do you still want to save this world, little Wisp?”

Slowly, Wisp looked around her. The darkness that seemed never ending, the thunder and lightning, the bare landscape all surrounded her. She could not remember her dreams looking as bad as this. “Yes,” she answered determinedly. “I didn’t think it was this bad.”

“You’ll need to find the source of color and light. The darkness has consumed it, and drained it from the land.”

“How do I do that?”

“You’ll want to find the sphere of light,” instructed the voice. As Wisp turned, she saw that a tiny ball of light hovered behind her.

“Sphere of light?” asked Wisp. She placed a finger to her chin. She hadn’t been told about this before. “What’s that?”

“It will help you restore this land to its former glory. Find it, and you will rid this world of the darkness.”

“But…where do I look for it?” She received no answer. “Hello?” she called, wondering if the woman merely hadn’t heard her. Still, there was no answer. The ball of light, and the voice, were gone. Wisp was on her own.

Wisp looked around her, trying to decide where to begin. She saw a long winding path going in either direction in front of her, so she decided that she would start walking. Perhaps someone would be able to help her locate this “sphere of light”.

Unbeknownst to Wisp, a small metal daisy popped up from the dry dirt. Its center focused and refocused, zooming in and zooming out. It whirred and clicked before setting its sight on the new being in front of it. Then, it began transmitting a feed to the source.

High in the clouds, a tiny pinprick of light looked down on the land below. “Good luck, little Wisp. I know you will rid this land of the darkness once and for all.”

A large bird flew over Wisp’s head, followed by another. Each bird seemed to resemble a crow in form, but had a much more menacing nature. The two creatures stopped when they saw an unfamiliar being below. They cawed and cackled to each other.

This drew Wisp’s attention, and she looked up at the two birds. “Have you see a sphere of light?” she called. The birds looked back at her, not answering. “Please help me. I want to find the color!”

Instead of an answer, both birds dive bombed, claws reaching out. They targeted her hair, clawing and scratching. Wisp cried out in pain and began to run, placing her hands over her to try and get rid of the birds. “What are you doing? Don’t you want to have a blue sky to fly in?”

The birds scattered, and for a moment, Wisp thought she’d scared him off, but she was merely face to face with a tree. A large trunked tree, with branches that seemed to move and reach for her, was directly in front of her. She realized her eyes weren’t playing tricks on her, and that it was indeed reaching for her. She ducked as a branch swooped down to grab her. “But…don’t you want colorful leaves on your branches?” she cried, backing away. She turned to run, but tripped on a stone. Pain shot through her knee and she looked down to see red droplets. There was no time to stop and think, however.

She picked herself up and began to run. “Why doesn’t anyone want to help? I really am all alone,” she said to herself.

Wisp crested the top of a hill and suddenly, without warning, it banked downward steeply. Her feet skidded and slipped beneath her as she tried to keep her balance. Her arms flung widely, and she lost the case she carried in the process. She looked down, and her eyes widened in fear. There was no ledge to land on, only blackness. She pulled her hands over her face to block out the emptiness below. Her leg scraped something sharp as she fell, but she didn’t feel the pain, only the adrenaline rush as she fell.

Soft. Everything felt soft beneath her. Slowly, she opened her eyes and looked around her. There were large spikes coming out of the soft ground. She pushed herself to her feet, finding it hard to stay balanced on the soft surface. Her arms flailed slightly as she precariously perched. Then she heard it—a low grumbling sound that seemed to vibrate from under her boots. The next thing she knew, she was being raised higher and higher into the air. It wasn’t simply a soft surface she’d landed on, but a large, olive green worm.

She grabbed on to a spike and held tightly as the worm began to toss about, trying to throw her off its back. “Stop it! Help me find the sphere of light!” she yelled, hoping that the creature would indeed listen to her and stop. Instead the creature gave one mighty toss, and she found herself flying through the air. She landed further down on the worm’s back, and felt dizzy when she tried to sit up. The worm tried to toss her once more, and she rolled off his back.

Annoyed, the worm sped off, kicking up a large cloud of dust. Wisp coughed as she stood up, wincing as she felt the pain in her left leg. She looked, only to find a shallow gash about three inches long. It wasn’t going to stop her from completing her task. Determined, she set off once more.

Small creatures began attacking her head, and Wisp felt the tiny legs of something at feet. She broke into a run, eyes keeping watch all around her. She wanted to get away from these…things. She wanted to find that sphere of light and change the land back to what it was supposed to be. It had to look better than this. Nothing could be any worse than this. Wisp was so caught up in her thoughts that she didn’t see what was right in front of her. She smacked into something, and flew back on her bottom, wincing at the pain that seemed to be a constant in this land. She blinked, and looked to see what she had run into.

In front of her was a furry creature, a little less than half her size. He took was rubbing his head, but acted startled when he glanced at her. He quickly scrambled to his feet. “Watch it!” he called. Then, he took off. “I’m outta here!”

Wisp watched him, fascinated. She didn’t move from the ground. The creature kept running, but stopped when he realized that Wisp hadn’t moved. “Why are you sitting around? If you’re not careful, the darkness will get you!”

“I’m looking for a sphere of light,” replied Wisp, still sitting.

“Well, I don’t know where you’d look for that, but you shouldn’t stay here!” The creature turned to go again.

“At least give me an idea.”

The creature looked at her as she began to walk closer. He opened his mouth to say something, but a large vibration on the ground stopped him. “Run!” he yelled, taking off.

Wisp turned her head to see what he was worried about, and saw a large purple creature running for them. It was the same ram that had chased the white creature before. The horns themselves looked deadly enough. She did not know what it was, but she began running after the white creature. “What is that thing?!” she yelled to him.

“A monster! If you’re not careful, you’ll be its dinner!” Without warning, the white creature veered to the left, and Wisp followed him. The ram continued running forward, propelled by blind madness.

Wisp took a deep breath as she gathered her thoughts. “Will he come back for us?” she asked.

The creature shook his head. “No… but more will come if we aren’t careful.” As if to prove his words true, another creature, this one lizard shaped, quickly sidled past their hiding spot.

“Where do they all go?” wondered Wisp.

“To the castle. They always go to the castle. That’s probably where the sphere of light is. Good luck finding it.” He looked both ways on the path. “Your castle is that way.” He pointed in one direction. “I’m going this way.” He pointed the opposite way, and began to run.

“Wait!” cried Wisp.

“No way! I’m not going to be eaten by anything today!” yelled the creature over his shoulder.

Wisp sighed. She hadn’t thought it would have been this hard to convince someone to help her out. All the creatures here were uninterested in their world being changed. They had tried to eat her. She’d been banged up in the process, and now the one creature she’d managed to talk to had run off. This certainly wasn’t a very pleasant place to be. However, it made her all the more determined to change that. She would make the land bright and beautiful again and she’d prove to the little creature that things would be all right.

One foot in front of the other, and she was on her way. She clenched her fists, and didn’t jump when the lightning suddenly struck. A bat flew for her head and she ducked, covering her face. She stood back up when the bat left her along, and felt something behind her. She turned quickly, fearing it was some other monster, but it was the white creature from before.

“I don’t see why you’re going to the castle,” he began. “Lots try to go, but no one ever comes back. It’s scary there, and…and…and the Evil One lives there. He makes the darkness and the monsters. He makes the sky always dark with thunder and lighting. He takes away your friends, and you never see them again. If I were you, I’d give up on getting that sphere of light!”

Wisp shook her head. “I can’t do that.”

“Why?” asked the creature.

“Because,” said Wisp, “I’m here to make the land beautiful again with color and happiness.”

“Is it really worth it?”

“Of course! Don’t you want the land to be different?”

“Yes,” replied the creature. “But I don’t want to go to the castle.

“We’ll go together then. My name is Wisp,” stated Wisp, offering her hand.

“I’m Twink,” replied the creature. “I’m a sprite.”

“Well, Twink, let’s head for the castle then.” She reached out and took his hand. Together, they began walking down the path. Unbeknownst to them, another metal daisy popped up behind them. It clicked and whirred until it had focused clearly on its subject. Then it began transmitting the feed.

Twink and Wisp continued to walk along the path. The thunder and lightning seemed to increase in volume. It became very apparent to Wisp that Twink was scared, especially when he jumped into her arms. She would put him down, and they would continue walking. They passed tall cliffs and large boulders. The sounds of creatures unknown echoed across the landscape, but none intersected their path. Wisp could feel Twink shaking just by holding his hand. “What’s wrong?”

“Do you really need that light? Can’t you use something else?”

“If I don’t get that sphere of light, the land will stay dark forever. You don’t want it to stay dark, do you?” asked Wisp. Twink shook his head. “Then I’ve got to find that sphere of light.”

Once more, they started their journey. Wisp could tell that Twink was still scared, so she squeezed his hand as they walked. Everything seemed calm and peaceful for once since Wisp had arrived. That quickly changed when the ground beneath her feet began rising and breaking apart. She could feel the heat rising from between the cracks, and saw fiery-red liquid pooling up. She jumped before it became too high, landing uneasily on her feet. When she looked beside her, Twink wasn’t there.

“Help!” he called from atop a chunk of rock. “Help me!”

“You have to jump, Twink!” called Wisp.

“It’s too high!”

“Jump, Twink! It’s the only way!”

Twink held his nose, and closed his eyes. He took one large leap from the rock chunk, and landed beside Wisp. He dusted his knees off and then turned away. “I’m going home! I don’t want to die today!” he explained.

“Wait, Twink! Come back! You just have to be brave!”

Twink didn’t know what to think, but he also didn’t want to be called a coward by Wisp. He turned and took a deep breath. Then he began following Wisp, trying to keep a straight face, regardless of the fear that was creeping up on him once more. His mouth twitched. He just wanted to run away and not go to the castle. “They do terrible things there at the castle,” he commented. “All kinds of sprites go there…but they never come back. The Evil One kills them!”

Wisp swallowed, but replied. “Are you sure that’s what he does?”

Twink nodded. “They never come back!”

“What if they’re just stuck there?” asked Wisp gently.

“I don’t…I don’t know,” answered Twink.

“We’ll find out, won’t we?”

“I guess so.”

It didn’t take very long before the duo came upon a natural stone bridge. Wisp looked down and saw that a river of bubbling lava awaited her if she fell. She took a deep breath, and set foot onto the narrow crossing.

“Wisp! Be careful!” called Twink.

“I will!” replied Wisp as she continued.

Before she could get to the middle of the bridge, a large bolt of lightning struck, decimating a large chunk of the middle. Wisp came to a stop and took a few steps backward. If the rock crumbled, she’d fall in too.

“What’ll we do now?” wailed Twink.

Wisp studied the situation. She looked at her surroundings. A dry tree had limbs that hung over the lava river. It looked high enough to reach. She took a running start and jumped with all her might. Her fingers touched the branch, and she gripped tightly. One of her hands slipped, and she let go with that hand.

“Wisp!”

Dangling precariously, Wisp started to feel the fear creeping up on her again. Her other hand began to slip, and she knew it would be the end if that happened. She reached up with the other hand, trying with all her might to grab back on the branch, all while her other hand continued to slip.

She put all her energy into reaching for the branch, and finally grabbed it. She hung for a few seconds, trying to calm herself. Now that she had her grip, all she had to do was get to the other side of the bridge. There was only one possible way. She began to swing herself back and forth like a gymnast, slowly gaining momentum. When she was certain, she released her hold as she swung out, and her feet touched the other side of the stone bridge. However, her balance was lacking. Her arms flailed as she tried to keep from falling backwards into the lava river. She fell forward, landing hard on her knees. For a few moments, she didn’t move. Slowly, she stood.

When Wisp looked at Twink, she was smiling. “Come on, Twink. It’s your turn now!”

Twink was shaking, certain that Wisp would die from her actions. “N-no that’s all right. I can stay right here while you go to the castle,” he suggested.

“Twink, you said you’d come with me.”

“But that was before the lava!”

“I believe in you, Twink. I know you can make it.”

Twink looked skeptically at Wisp and then up at the tree branch. It looked sturdy, but that didn’t mean it was sturdy. He took a running start and jumped. Like Wisp, he swung on the branch, carefully getting the feel. He released his hold, and flew through the air.

Wisp realized what was happening before Twink did. She watched in shock as Twink fell short of the ledge. She closed her eyes, fearful that her new friend had fallen into the river. Tears started to well up.

“Wisp…help me…” came the weak cry.

When Wisp opened her eyes, she saw one tiny hand gripping the ledge. Quickly, she rushed forward, struggling to pull Twink up to safety. She dug her feet in, and felt herself sliding. If she wasn’t careful, they’d both fall in. Finally, she felt herself moving backward until Twink was safely back on the bridge. It seemed as though a long time had passed, but really, it was merely a few minutes.

“That was close,” remarked Wisp.

“Y-yeah,” answered Twink nervously. He didn’t want to go through that again.

Wisp brushed herself off. She held out her hand once again. “Come on. We’ve still got to get to the castle.”

Twink sighed. “Are you still sure you want to do this?” He took her outstretched hand.

“Of course! Nothing could stop me!” she declared as she began to continue down the path.
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Re: Rainbow Brite: An Original Retelling

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moonglo s arrival :

Hehe ... this time I was sure that you like my idea. :) *boast* :lol:

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I hope I am able to read part 2 of your retelling-story tommorow ... my pink eyes ease a little bit but it is still terrible ... I hate this silly head-cold I catched !!! :angry:

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Re: Rainbow Brite: An Original Retelling

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Tom-sprite wrote:moonglo s arrival :

Hehe ... this time I was sure that you like my idea. :) *boast* :lol:

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I hope I am able to read part 2 of your retelling-story tommorow ... my pink eyes ease a little bit but it is still terrible ... I hate this silly head-cold I catched !!! :angry:
Read at your own pace, lol. I haven't written anything for the third part yet. I've been dabbling in doing some fics for Simoun (which are in my blog), and have been having fun with those. I still find it amusing that no matter what, I've gotten quite a good amount of pages completed for writing in general...I know it's over 50 at this point for the past two weeks and that's just crazy. It's never like this.
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Re: Rainbow Brite: An Original Retelling

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You are very productive. :thumb: :thumb: :thumb:
When you enjoy something so much you are able to work out tons of creative stuff.
Reminds me a bit of of my drawing-addiction when I attended art-school. ;)

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